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October 18: I got another poem from Martin Koppany:
 Here's the note he sent it with: "I'm attaching something I also made a few weeks ago. I didn't want to send it yet (he was saving it as a gift for someone) but it is a natural reaction, perhaps, to Geof Huth's "Breaking out of Dream" - if for nothing else, for its title."
My reply to this, slightly edited, was, "Hmm, I can't remember Geof's poem. As for your poem, I immediately liked it. Don't feel close to fathoming it, though. Pause to the power of matter? Can I use it on my blog or do you consider it too unfinished at this point? (He gave permission.) Beware, fragments of ideas caused by it and your use of borders inside borders have enter my head, so I may come up with a punctuational poem of my own in reaction. I can tell you the idea that occurred at once on my seeing your poem--a horizontal line as you've used it recently. Mine would be vertical, I think, and demarcate waking life from sleep/dream.
More often than not, my ideas for poems remain ideas for poems, but this one I followed through on:
 A nice enough little poem, I think. What I really like is the idea of a punctuation mark as an exponent. Have I used it before? I dunno, but plan to make a few more poems using it. I also like the idea of an exponent's powering some image into a new dimension of sorts. But the image go do that without the exponent, as so:
 This is a rip-off of Marton's use of borders and the "sleeep" by Richard Kostelanetz that I've already used in a mathemaku and am always going on about in my criticism. Trivial, I think, but pointing toward far better exploitations.
That's it for today. I'm off to try to work out how a comma would work as an exponent. A question mark wouldn't work--it'd just make the poem it was in an exam question. Which could be interesting. . . .
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